I have a few erotic short stories I’m working on, and in one of them I’ve arrived to the sex scene. During outlining it, I questioned if the guy should cum multiple times. Is it hotter if they don’t, or does the lack of realism take you out of the story?
Are there any other porn-logic tropes in stories that turn you on or off?
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I’d approach it from first figuring out who this character is. Their life so far, their motivations, their emotional state. Let the character tell you if he’s the type to cum multiple times.
Fwiw I’ve cum twice in a row one time so far. It was incredible. We were both surprised. If you’ve ever done it, it feels different. Consider writing with that experience in mind.
Edit: unless there’s a reason a character is a sex god, I don’t expect them to be one 🙃
I know exactly who the character is, and in any normal circumstance I would write it on the more realistic side. Some of the character interactions are a bit unrealistic, but not wildly so. More, a “this is unlikely to happen between these two people”.
What I’m asking is if those that enjoy reading erotic fiction want the sex itself to be physically exaggerated, or if they prefer it to be grounded.
I’m fine with some amount of exaggeration (and at least for me, too much realism can actually take me out of the story).
The guy comes twice, and you write about how this seldom happens to him, is caused by how hot the sex is, how he was longing to be with [partner] for a long time,… – perfectly fine. If he comes 10 times in a row, you better have written multiple paragraphs of explanation for it (medical condition? experimental sex drug? not actually a human? [partner] has magical powers?) ;)
I don’t mind exaggerated at all. It’s very difficult to write sex scenes in the first place, I don’t get stuck on whether the action and responses are likely IRL. That doesn’t take me out of the moment the same way bad writing might.
I also don’t mind exaggerated. I’d like to be able to picture myself in that situation, but I have some imagination available. And I know realistic and grounded sex. That’s not what I read literature for.
If the guy is going to cum multiple times and he’s older than 21 then make sure to account for the 20-40 min of fooling around before he’s hard again. At 19 he can probably go 2-3 times before getting soft.
If a story has something like:
My wife is still beautiful. With a perfect 34/18/42 body, and large perky nipples…
Then I just move onto the next story immediately. It’s such a boring cliche and creates an exact mechanical woman.
Their body type can be hinted at.
My wife has hips your eyes can’t help but admire, and breasts that any woman would be proud of.
That let’s the reader create their own desirable women in their mind.
For me, that’s a woman that looks like my wife. For others it might be a totally different body type, but they’ll still create that image.
I hate when someone puts a bra size into their story. They almost never know how bra sizing works, and it immediately irritates me. I’ve seen a lot of 32in waisted women that somehow wear a 44F bra 🙄.
I’ll describe shapes and sizes, but from a character’s point of view. I’ll write it in a way that a regular person might have described through conversation or reaction. Sort of like your preferred example.
Agreed. Never measurements, never ever a bra size, it is silly. My disbelief cannot be suspended that far.
It’s difficult. Sometimes it’s necessary to introduce that, since it generally also throws the reader off if they got time to form a picture in their head and you suddenly destroy that and have her large blubbery breasts weigh down on your chest on page 20. Or need to describe her eyes in detail later because they look at each other for a minute. Or in book 2 her sister comes visit her who also has ginger hair… I think that’s the reason why people do it. The less specific you are, the more you have to constantly factor in that all the characters could have vastly different appearances. And later descriptions of scenes have to get even less detailed.
Generally speaking I’m completely with you. Reading stories sparks imagination. And it’s fun to imagine the characters, picture the scenes. It’s not easy to write it that way.
Why is a guy cumming multiple times considered lack of realism?
Because most men don’t. You or your partners(s) are very lucky people lol
Maybe they’re just inefficient. Why do it twice when you could just get it all out in 1 go? I prefer the firehouse method.
